My Story
In an old abandoned Museum you can hear old creaking sounds as you walk. Suddenly a high pitched sound comes from under the old boxes and your friend has just Vanished!! You also hear a shuddering laugh… You go a little further into the Museum and a splat of blood is on the floor, There is a whole :trail of splattered blood! You suddenly start to follow it! At the end of the trail there is a dead person! You immediately freak out it is so scary!
Self Assessment
Things I think I have done well:
I have used descriptive language
My story made sense
Things I need to work on
Using more punctuation
Pair asment
Work on’s Things you need to work on you need to work on not youing double words like you immediately freak out and then you said it again.
Thing that you have done well I like how you done and you'd some descriptive words
