WALT: Create a Persuasive piece of Writing.
The Kids that arrive at school before 8:30 should be allowed to hangout in the hall until the 8:30 bell rings.
Have you ever arrived at school before 8:30 and had to wait outside in the freezing cold until the bell rings at 8:30?
I think that the kids that arrive at school before 8:30 should be able to go and hangout in the hall until the 8:30 bell rings.
If the kids wait outside it could lead to some people getting hyperthermia which can lead to death. Also 1,301 people from America die of hyperthermia every year
Did you know that your skin can actually freeze in low temperatures because of being out in the cold for too long? And frostnip has the same method if you stand in the cold for too long you get frostnip.You usually get frostnip on your ears,nose,fingers,cheeks,chin and hands. Dr craig Warden says that you should not even attempt to walk on frost nipped feet.
Another reason that I think that we should be allowed to go in the school hall is that the teachers get to hang out in their offices and in their classrooms and be nice and warm and we have to wait outside in the freezing cold until the 8:30 bell rings.
In conclusion I believe that this is why kids should be allowed to go in the school hall to do fun activities with a teacher while waiting for the 8:30 bell rings to go into class.
Persuasive Writing Success Criteria
Introduction
- Opening question
- Opinion/Reason
3 Reasons
- Each paragraph is one idea supported with your reasons/facts
Conclusion
- This ties back/recaps back to the introduction
Highlight evidence of linking words.
Nova I loved how you had really interesting facts about frostnip and hypothermia and the detail was phenomenal and I loved how you got yellow for everything great job.
Kind regards
Arliah
Thanks Arliah I love your feedback when you marked it I noticed that I used the word and a lot maybe I could use some more linking words next time I also noticed that you had arked everything yellow and that made me really happy
Kind regards
Nova
