Kia Ora! My name is Maddison I am a year 8 student at Yaldhurst Model School. I think that this is such an amazing idea! This is an awesome way to keep thinking positive and to have a good mindset.
Your dog sounds absolutely adorable! :) I love how you wrote about her and you desribed her colour.
I think that one way you could improve is maybe add in some rhyming words to create flow and rhythm. I also think a way to improve would be to add in some images or more colour maybe you could add in an image of your dog.
Kia Or Nova I am Olivia B from Yaldhurst Model School This was a perfect paragraph it was very good I love dogs they are my favourite pets to have they are fun and sometimes playfull and I like having them around your blog is a bit small it seems to me but it is still an amazing blog but just a bit small.
I Nova I am Alvin from YMS I really like your blog it is sad to hear that your dog died. but it was great to hear that you got a new one! but sady I am elergic to dogs. did you think about adding some photos? and also you should ask some questions at the end of the blog so that other people will want to comment on your blog! but other than that great Job!
Hi Alvin My dog did not die you might have got a bit confused but Pryor wasn't the dog he was mums friend. and yes net time I will add some photos of my dog.
Hi Nova! (pretty name, by the way!) My name is Hana and I'm a year 6 from Yaldhurst Model School!
Wow, Nova! What a perfect paragraph! It's cool to hear about other people's pets! And It's sad to hear that Pryor's old owner died! I hope that Pryor wasn't too sad, because a pet loosing it's owner is just like us loosing someone that we love. It's extremely hard! Well, enough about sad stuff, let's look at the positive stuff! I like how much detail you've added to your perfect paragraph! It tells us a lot about interesting things!
I remember my dog, Oscar! He was sometimes a bit annoying... He ALWAYS gets lost, and him being a blind, AND deaf dog won't really help. He was a cool little dog, and he had a good life. He was a Jack russell. He lived until 15! Although, he had to get put down, since he started going around in circles, and kept bumping into things. It was really sad when he was put down!
To improve, you could tell us WHY it's called a perfect paragraph. Some backstory would be nice! Other than that, your blog post is perfect! (Heh, see what I did there?? Perfect PARAGRAPH, perfect BLOG?? ;-;)
Hi Nova My name Is Ethan from Yms I Like the way you have added lots of deatil next time you could add a picture of the dog, Great Post, Bye for now Ethan
Hi Nova my name is Ashlee and I really like this blog post you did so good. Hi I am a student here at Yaldhurst Model School in a class called rimu.
Maybe next time do you think you could add a picture, Ha but I think it is so cute that your dog violet's nickname is filthy that should be the nickname for my horse she is always rolling in the mud and then I have to give her a bath lol.
It is so sad that Pryor violets owner passed away in the car crash but it's good that you know own a dog that sounds like such a personality. Bye good post
Kia Ora!
ReplyDeleteMy name is Maddison I am a year 8 student at Yaldhurst Model School. I think that this is such an amazing idea! This is an awesome way to keep thinking positive and to have a good mindset.
Your dog sounds absolutely adorable! :)
I love how you wrote about her and you desribed her colour.
I think that one way you could improve is maybe add in some rhyming words to create flow and rhythm. I also think a way to improve would be to add in some images or more colour maybe you could add in an image of your dog.
Kia Or Nova I am Olivia B from Yaldhurst Model School
ReplyDeleteThis was a perfect paragraph it was very good I love dogs they are my favourite pets to have they are fun and sometimes playfull and I like having them around your blog is a bit small it seems to me but it is still an amazing blog but just a bit small.
I Nova I am Alvin from YMS I really like your blog it is sad to hear that your dog died. but it was great to hear that you got a new one! but sady I am elergic to dogs. did you think about adding some photos? and also you should ask some questions at the end of the blog so that other people will want to comment on your blog! but other than that great Job!
ReplyDeleteHi Alvin
DeleteMy dog did not die you might have got a bit confused but Pryor wasn't the dog he was mums friend. and yes net time I will add some photos of my dog.
Hi Nova! (pretty name, by the way!) My name is Hana and I'm a year 6 from Yaldhurst Model School!
ReplyDeleteWow, Nova! What a perfect paragraph! It's cool to hear about other people's pets! And It's sad to hear that Pryor's old owner died! I hope that Pryor wasn't too sad, because a pet loosing it's owner is just like us loosing someone that we love. It's extremely hard! Well, enough about sad stuff, let's look at the positive stuff! I like how much detail you've added to your perfect paragraph! It tells us a lot about interesting things!
I remember my dog, Oscar! He was sometimes a bit annoying... He ALWAYS gets lost, and him being a blind, AND deaf dog won't really help. He was a cool little dog, and he had a good life. He was a Jack russell. He lived until 15! Although, he had to get put down, since he started going around in circles, and kept bumping into things. It was really sad when he was put down!
To improve, you could tell us WHY it's called a perfect paragraph. Some backstory would be nice! Other than that, your blog post is perfect! (Heh, see what I did there?? Perfect PARAGRAPH, perfect BLOG?? ;-;)
Keep up the great work!
-Hana
Hi Hana.
DeleteI think you are a little bit confused. Pryor was Violets owner and he died Violet did not die and she survived the crash.
from Nova
Hi Nova My name Is Ethan from Yms I Like the way you have added lots of deatil next time you could add a picture of the dog,
ReplyDeleteGreat Post, Bye for now Ethan
Hi Nova my name is Ashlee and I really like this blog post you did so good. Hi I am a student here at Yaldhurst Model School in a class called rimu.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time do you think you could add a picture, Ha but I think it is so cute that your dog violet's nickname is filthy that should be the nickname for my horse she is always rolling in the mud and then I have to give her a bath lol.
It is so sad that Pryor violets owner passed away in the car crash but it's good that you know own a dog that sounds like such a personality.
Bye good post